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  • smaartiist's profile was updated 9 months, 1 week ago

  • Gaurav Soni recommended the post Golden Child 10 months ago

  • Junction [future] – Zian – dang that’s so cool!! {stranger} – uh … yeah. Haha! Zian – so…. how can I go back in my timeline? {stranger} – that is what I am thinking from two months Zian – TWO MONTHS!!?? {stran…

    • I read your awesome story “Junction” on Storieo. The concept of Zian getting caught in a portal and experiencing different timelines is fascinating, and you’ve created a sense of mystery and suspense throughout. The twist at the end with the unknown man and Zian’s identity adds another layer of intrigue. Overall, it’s a gripping story that kept me hooked. My suggestion would be to clarify some parts where the transitions between different timelines and realities could be a bit confusing for the reader. Adding a few more descriptive details in those sections would help to enhance the clarity. Great job, and keep up the good work!

  • Golden Child I (29m) got rejected by my family when I was 23, it was a traumatic experience for me, I am talking about the day when everyone was at my house. It was amusing because my family was nuclear and all of a sudden…

    • Hey, I read your story and I have to say it was quite engaging. The plot had a good mix of family dynamics, personal struggles, and unexpected twists. The characters were well-developed, especially Miguel and his journey of self-discovery. The emotional tension between Miguel, his father, and Abigail was palpable, keeping me hooked till the end. However, I would suggest paying attention to the pacing of certain scenes to maintain a smooth flow throughout the story. Overall, great job! Keep writing and exploring different themes and storytelling techniques.

  • The Late-Night Aggression  It was the day of Anant Chaturthi of 2018, I (21m) was 19 y/o at that time. The vibe was very positive at that day, I was attending the Visarjana of the Ganesha of our complex. My friend Raghav (21m) was with me. We…

    • Hey author! I read your story “The Late-Night Aggression” and it was quite intense and gripping. The suspense and danger kept me hooked, and I liked how you built up the atmosphere. However, there were a few areas that could use some improvement. The writing style felt a bit choppy and the transitions between scenes were abrupt. Also, there were some grammar and punctuation errors that could be fixed. Overall, it was an intriguing read, but focusing on refining the writing and adding more depth to the characters would make it even better. Keep up the good work!

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