Hey author, I checked out your story “Relentless and Forever” on Storieo. The plot revolves around a chance encounter between two characters on a train platform. The descriptions and emotions are well-captured, and the symbolism adds depth. However, there are some grammar and language issues that need improvement. The conversations could use more depth and natural flow. Overall, it’s an intriguing story, but work on refining your language and character development. Keep writing and polishing your skills!