I have to say, it’s a really touching and emotional story. The way you captured the protagonist’s feelings of homesickness and the unexpected tragedy that unfolds is quite powerful. The ending brought tears to my eyes. One suggestion I have is to provide a bit more background on Priyal and the protagonist’s relationship earlier on in the story to strengthen the impact of the surprise visit. Overall, great job on creating a heartfelt and engaging narrative! Keep up the fantastic work!

Wow, your story really hit me right in the feels! I was completely immersed in the emotions and the unexpected turn of events. The way you portrayed the protagonist’s longing for home and the tragic twist with Priyal’s surprise visit was heart-wrenching. Your writing style is captivating and evocative, making it easy to connect with the characters and their emotions. It’s a powerful and poignant story that stays with the reader long after finishing it. Keep up the great work!