There is a girl named Koko who is an elder sister of Dodo. Dodo is a school student who reads in class 5th.Koko used to pack his lunchbox daily with healthy home made foods but Dodo used to refuse to take his lunchbox because he always demands for the unhealthy snacks and junk foods but Koko in return serves him with healthy options. So, Koko used to give him 20 rupees note daily in return of him having his healthy meal happily without any drama. But Dodo is clever and naughty enough so he used to feed his lunch to his friend Chau and spent his 20 rupess for having unhealthy junk snacks from the school canteen. Also when asked by Koko about the completion of his lunch food , he used to lie to her by nodding and affirming her that he enjoys the healthy meal. But on the other side, Chau used to make him understand the importance & advantages of healthy lifestyle & healthy food and also encounters him about the disadvantages and causes of having unhealthy junk food. But Dodo being dodo used to ignore even his friend’s teachings and continues doing the same for long. As the time flews, dodo starts gaining weight too much to often and every alternate days he gets severe sick and issues with his health. Even Koko was so concerned for him, she tries to give him the best treatment as possible. But later on his stomach infections got severe and leads him to have a major stomach operation in such a small age. Koko felt helpless and was confused totally how these happens all of a sudden when she strictly take cares of his health from feeding him healthy food to making sure having healthy lifestyle. Seeing koko, dodo felt miserable and was in great guilt that his sister loves him so much and have so much of concern & has taken so much of effort towards him for his healthy lifestyle. While he always lies to her and never understand the learnings which Koko and chau used to give him for his own. He later on realises his mistakes and confesses the truth to her sister. Even the doctor advises both koko and dodo to majorly take care about the health and opt healthy foods and natural juices in compared to unhealthy junk options. Doctor even shares the importance of having coconut water in their daily lives as it is a good source of water intake and contains every nutrients/health benefits that helps our body to stay fit and away from the diseases and introduces them with the health benefits of “Cocoworks” for having healthy natural lifestyle.
Jun 24
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Hi there.
You have an easy to understand story which when read feels like tales told by an elder to their child. Thus the story has a warm feeling.
It’s a very quick paced story. The language is good but please check for grammatical mistakes. Instead of having the names Dodo and Koko repeated again and again, maybe pronouns could be incorporated.
Overall, the story gave a wonderful message, and is a good quick read.
Please keep writing more.
Introduction:
The story above depicts a classic haunted house story in which a young couple moves into a new home and immediately experiences paranormal activity. The story follows a conventional structure with increasing tension, supernatural elements, and an eerie climax. This literature review aims to analyze the main components of narratives and examine the effectiveness of narrative structure, themes, and the use of suspenseful and supernatural elements.
Story structure:
“Ghostly Encounter in New Home” follows a linear narrative structure that begins with the couple’s initial excitement for their new home and ends with a spooky experience and subsequent avoidance of the attic. The story effectively builds suspense through a series of bizarre events, culminating in a terrifying encounter with a ghostly girl in the attic. Tension and Atmosphere:
One of the strengths of this story is its ability to create and sustain suspense. From the moment strange events begin, such as doors slamming and objects moving inexplicably, the story creates an eerie atmosphere. Tensions rise further when the couple hears whispers in the attic and discovers the presence of a ghostly girl. The story effectively arouses the reader’s fear of the unknown, using dark places and supernatural elements to create a sense of dread.
Supernatural elements:
The inclusion of supernatural elements is a defining aspect of this story. A ghostly girl in a vintage dress and eerie attitude adds an element of mystery and spookiness. Their appearance and demeanor are consistent with traditional spirit archetypes and evoke a sense of unease and fear. The appearance of a ghostly girl and her later actions in her attic strengthen the supernatural aspect of the story and add to its overall impact.
Subject:
Although the story is primarily focused on the paranormal, some underlying themes can be identified. The main theme is the destruction of domestic happiness. A young couple were excited to start life in their new home, but suddenly faced malevolent forces that threatened their peace and security. This theme highlights the fragility of human existence and the potential for invisible forces to disrupt our sense of normalcy.
Another theme of this story is the unknown power and the fear it causes. The couple’s inability to understand the ghostly girl’s whispers or sense her intentions amplifies their paranormal fears. The story highlights the fear of the unseen and the persistent anxiety that comes with encountering the supernatural. Diploma:
“Haunted Encounters in New Homes” effectively uses narrative structure, suspense, and supernatural elements to create a spooky tale. This spooky, tense story draws readers into a world of haunted houses and spooky encounters. The use of traditional ghost archetypes and exploration of themes related to anarchy and the horror of the unknown enhance the story’s impact and leave a lasting impression on the reader.