The wind howled and rain battered against the windows of the old house. The storm had been going on for a few hours and didn’t appear to be going away anytime soon. Caroline had recently moved to the suburbs of the town, seeking peace and an opportunity to start over. However, she was unaware that the house she had moved into had a deadly mystery within its confines.

Caroline was startled awake by the sound of shuffling right outside her bedroom door. Knowing she was supposed to be alone, Caroline slowly walked to her door, armed with her bedside lamp. She wrenched it open, hoping to catch her intruder off guard. A chill went down her spine when she did not see anyone. “It’s just the wind,” she tried to convince herself. But as soon as the words left her mouth, she heard footsteps to her right. 

“Who’s there?” She called out, trying to keep her voice steady. Her heart started beating erratically when she heard a very faint but sinister chuckle. “Who is it?” 

“You know who I am, Caroline,” someone whispered in her ear, and she immediately turned around. There was not a soul in sight, but that voice! She knew that voice! But that should be impossible; he was supposed to be dead! 

Caroline had killed him.

Suddenly she was harshly shoved against the wall, making her bang her head on it. 

“You think you can get rid of me so easily? That I wouldn’t get my revenge?” 

“You-you were dead!” She stuttered out, lightheaded. There was that chuckle again, but it was much closer this time.

“You were mistaken. I survived. And now? Now I will get my revenge.” He laughed.

I should have been more careful, was her last thought as her vision blackened.

Responses

  1. Priyanshi Gautam

    The narrative does a fantastic job of setting up a tension-filled, mysterious atmosphere that envelops readers in a terrifying universe full of secrets and otherworldly elements. The writer sets the scene for the protagonist’s perilous trek by skillfully describing the stormy night and the unsettling old mansion in vivid detail.

    In search of comfort and a new beginning in a new house, Caroline, the primary heroine, is empathetic and relatable. Layers of intricacy are added to her situation by the turn brought on by her learning of the evil presence inside the house. Her predicament is made more complicated by the twist of her discovering the evil presence inside the house and by the fact that she once had a connection to the enraged ghost. Readers may feel Caroline’s dread and tenacity as they identify with her survival fight.

    The writer’s ability to convey Caroline’s emotions, adds depth to her character and enhances the overall impact of the story. The dialogue is well-crafted, effectively conveying the tension between the characters and advancing the plot.